IOC Prep: Macbeth
Recording: https://drive.google.com/open?id=1hbvjYIiAKo-aEUULE2fjjBuQkIW5uwFp
Notes on the passage : https://drive.google.com/open?id=18KBuInb2eGi_HnumvckCMBVl20SZWSxY
My notes: https://drive.google.com/open?id=1ie3wdalWMhydfpnB_aXJzAlpWNol0x9x
A: 5 - I think I sufficiently contextualize the passage, but I got flustered and forgot the details of Shakespeare's intent for the novel, so that's cool.
B: 4 - I referenced only two (2) literary devices, simile and tone (and tone basically doesn't count). I mostly just focused on the structure of the excerpt, which isn't really a device.
C: 5 - I thought it was alright, but occasionally I got nervous and to comfort myself just threw my thesis into the middle of my evidence without any sort of anticipated strategic placement. There's definitely some kind of chronology, but I think I could do better.
D: 4 - This was such an oof. There are parts when I sound like I'm reading out of a Thesaurus and others where I just toss in copious amounts of "really"s and "big"s. I need to find the happy medium.
Notes on the passage : https://drive.google.com/open?id=18KBuInb2eGi_HnumvckCMBVl20SZWSxY
My notes: https://drive.google.com/open?id=1ie3wdalWMhydfpnB_aXJzAlpWNol0x9x
A: 5 - I think I sufficiently contextualize the passage, but I got flustered and forgot the details of Shakespeare's intent for the novel, so that's cool.
B: 4 - I referenced only two (2) literary devices, simile and tone (and tone basically doesn't count). I mostly just focused on the structure of the excerpt, which isn't really a device.
C: 5 - I thought it was alright, but occasionally I got nervous and to comfort myself just threw my thesis into the middle of my evidence without any sort of anticipated strategic placement. There's definitely some kind of chronology, but I think I could do better.
D: 4 - This was such an oof. There are parts when I sound like I'm reading out of a Thesaurus and others where I just toss in copious amounts of "really"s and "big"s. I need to find the happy medium.
ANNE ROSS!!!
ReplyDeleteI think you killed this practice IOC and you’re going to kill it on the real one(: I think you did a really good job of placing the excerpt within the greater text. I definitely knew what was going on at that point. I think that your focus on the structure was an interesting take, straying from the more obvious literary devices. It was cool because it focused on different things than I would have gathered analyzing the text myself. Also, I disagree with your description of criterion D as an “oof” because as always,
I think you articulate your thoughts very nicely. Great job!
Jesus that was well done Anne Ross. The contextualization of the passage in terms of the play was phenomenally done (I barely did that in my IOC practice). Also the explanation of the tensions going on during Shakespeare time was great! It really showed that you have an understanding for the text which is defiantly going to gain you points during the IOC. The themes that you focused on was really interesting. You didn't go for the obvious approach, instead took a very interesting route and did a great job with it. You are going to do an amazing job in the real IOC. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I hate you just a little because you really rocked that! There was a real flow of information and it was a really well structured argument and overall commentary. Secondly, for me situating my passage into like something bigger is always really hard, but you made it so clear and sound so easy and simple so really good job. I know you said you thought you focused a lot on structure, but I think that was vital and useful and is typically always skipped over, and I think it was very relevant fro you to take some time to focus on that. YA KILLED IT GIRLIE!!!!
ReplyDeleteHey Anne Ross! You did great on this pratice and you will do great on the real IOC. I liked how you gave the context of what was going on during the time was good because it showed you had knowledge on the motives and possible influences it had on Shakespeare. You did great and good luck on your IOC!
ReplyDeleteAnne Ross:
ReplyDelete- What great feedback from your peers :)
- Good structure and organization; strong thesis. Be sure you keep linking back to those key ideas to prove how they are developed in the passage
- Make sure you are really looking at the passage ONLY- there are places where you are kinda veering into "book club"
- I agree with your feedback to yourself about thinking about author's purpose/effect on reader.
A: 6
B: 6
C: 4
D: 4